My competition is a destructive free-for-all in which you all fight for the death for a wish of your choosing. Here we go! Go! Go! Go!

My name is Michael Pyles. I'm competing to get revenge on that clown for savagely murdering my son in last years competition. just another day at the office.

Well it's always good to see new faces around here with new ideas. I will give you some advice first:

There's no need to triple post. Those three posts could have easily been one, with separate paragraphs. And slow down a bit, don't rush your writing. Take your time, expand on your ideas, clarify them a little more. For example it would be nice to know what vehicle Michael Pyles is driving. If he's going to be the main character it would be nice to see a little more explanation. And your whole story could use a little more exposition, it jumped into the action kind of quickly without much setup. Lastly, it's always fun to use proper grammar. Commas are your friend, and capitalizing at the beginning of sentences is paramount.

Sorry if I came off a bit critical, I just want to help you improve. Reading other fics is always helpful, thumpermann, dizasterchild, oddz, or myself for example.  I am excited to see where you go with this. Please continue