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Logan
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Twisted Metal Origins
04/18/10 at 00:26:28
 
Ok so this is my first post on this website. I've been looking here and reading the fanfics for a while, and I thought most of them were quite amazing. I just now joined the site and I was wondering what everyone thought of my idea to create something that resembles X-Men Origins: Wolverine, but for the Twisted Metal Universe. My first character profiled was going to be Sweet Tooth, then Outlaw, Minion, Roadkill, Spectre, Darkside, Shadow, Crimson Fury, Warthog, Mr. Grimm, and finally Calypso. If you think this is a good idea, let me know. If you think this sounds stupid, let me know. If you have any other characters that you would like profiled, let me know.
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Reply #1 - 04/18/10 at 02:30:15
 
Sounds great, a new take on established ideas. Go for it. It might be a tad difficult because I feel like all the black characters had pretty solid background stories, but I'm interested in what you could do with this
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Reply #2 - 04/18/10 at 05:56:27
 
sounds familiar to me... *looks at 'The Twisted Metal Chronicles: Behind the Paint'*
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Reply #3 - 04/18/10 at 09:32:59
 
Yeah, the idea is getting more and more overdone. The only originality that can really come from a fanfic section would be the creation of whole new cars, but even that can be difficult.

Either way, if you've got a new spin on an old move then go for it.
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Reply #4 - 04/18/10 at 16:00:22
 
Well I will give it a shot, and if you guys like it then tell me to keep going. If the ideas seem too similar to TM Chronicles or even the storylines from Black, let me know. But for today, here is Sweet Tooth.

Driver: Needles Kane
Needles Kane is the definition of a psychopath: a crazed schizophrenic that drives an ice cream truck with a clown mask on that kills lots of innocent people for no apparent reason. There is a reason for all the madness however, as Needles didn't grow up in the nicest of environments. He enters the Twisted Metal competition this year to have vengance on his family for making him the way he is.

Car: Sweet Tooth (Tasty Treats Ice Cream Truck)
Armored bank car/ice cream truck on the outside, screaming death on the inside, Sweet Tooth is easily one of the most feared cars in the whole competition. How Needles Kane got his hands on this truck is not fully known, although many blame Calypso for giving the truck to Needles when he was a small child. Either way, all other competitors have a lot of work to do to be on the same level as the undisputed champion of Twisted Metal.

Intro
(Sweet Tooth is shown on top of a cliff with Needles visible in the front seat)
Needles: What has happened to me?
(Camera goes inside Sweet Tooth to show Needles with his head in his hands)
Needles: I've been betrayed by my family, screwed over by Calypso, I have this God forsaken curse on my head...
(Needles looks up and the player can see that the flames have gotten worse on his head, burning through his scalp)
Needles:...and I have nothing at all to show for it. I remember being a little kid, loved by my family, having nothing to do with Calypso or his damn contest, no curse...everything was good then. But now, everything has gone wrong. I'm going to find Calypso, play his stupid little game one last time, and finish everything my family started.

Middle
(Dark Tooth explodes into many pieces, one of which hits Sweet Tooth and knocks Needles out)
Needles: That giant thing...it exploded and knocked me out cold. I felt myself fall back in my seat...then I had the flashbacks again.
(Flashback of the Kane home: Needles, his father Charlie, his baby brother Michael *name of kid in the taxi from Black, made it up*, and his mother Melissa. Melissa and Charlie are arguing about Needles in the kitchen, and Needles walks in.)
Needles (from present point of view): I remember it all now. My mom and dad were arguing about me, about what I had done to the neighbor kid. He beat me up, so I decided to return the favor *A bloody knife is seen in the kitchen*
Charile: The boy is nothing more than a danger to society. We need to send him away so he can't hurt anyone ever again.
Melissa: No Charlie. I won't let you. He is our first born son, so he is our responsibility. We can't lock him away just because of this. If we locked all the killers away you would be gone too!
(Charlie punches Melissa in the face, sending her to the ground. He then goes and grabs the knife, giving it to Needles)
Charlie: Finish the bitch off. If she's not dead by the time I come back in here, I'll kill you too!
(Charlie runs out of the room and Needles looks at his mother, scared.)
Needles: I was looking into eyes full of fear for the first time, and something just snapped in my mind. I ripped my mother apart limb by limb. It was sickening but it felt so damn good at the same time.
(Needles wakes up)
Needles: But even a psycho has to have his limits, boys and girls. Too bad I don't have any limits on killing family members anymore.
(Needles drives off into the next arena)

Ending
(Yellow Jacket is seen, burning and rusting away. Charlie and Michael can be seen in the car, screaming for help. Needles hops out of Sweet Tooth and walks to them.)
Needles: The burning doesn't feel to good, does it dad? And what about you, baby brother? Does it make you feel all tingly inside knowing your own brother is going to leave your ass to die?
(Michael can be seen crying, holding onto his father, and Charlie gives Needles a middle finger before catching on fire. Needles has won Twisted Metal, and is now in front of Calypso.)
Needles: I've won your shitty little game again, and I've got my vengeance against my stupid ass father. Now its time for my wish.
(Calypso nods)
Calypso: What do you want this year, Needles? Make it quick too, I am expecting company any time now that wouldn't like it very much if you were here.
Needles: I want you to bring my mother back to life. I want to see her the way she was before my dad flipped out.
Calypso: Your wish has been granted, Needles. Turn around.
(Needles turns around and sees his mother, Melissa. He embraces her again for the first time in years.)
Needles: Mom! You're back!
Melissa: Yes son, I have returned for you.
(Melissa grabs Needles' knife then looks up at Calypso and smirks as she forces the knife through Needles and into herself)
Needles: Why mom? Why?
Melissa: So we can spend the rest of our lives together, you, me, your father, and brother.
(Melissa laughs as Needles leans on her, dead. Melissa dies shortly after)
Calypso: Even I am not that twisted.
(Screen goes black with Sweet Tooths' ice cream truck music from Black playing softly. Credits roll as The Mirror's Truth by In Flames plays)

THE END!

What did everybody think?
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Reply #5 - 04/18/10 at 16:15:25
 
That was not bad, not bad at all. I was afraid you wouldn't be able to come up with a different original background for sweettooth, as both thumperman and dizasterchild already did similar things. I'm actually not sure how close this parallels dizaster's idea because I haven't finished reading behind the paint yet. But it was well written and interesting. I liked the famiy scene with Charlie and Melissa when needles was a kid. The ending seemed strange though, and the only other thing that iI would say is that sweettooth seemed a little too remorseful and reminiscent, I've always pictured him as too far gone to want to go back. But anyways, it was good.
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Reply #6 - 04/18/10 at 16:22:46
 
Well thanks for reading and thinking it was good for my first time. I realize the ending was a little messed up but it was the first thing I came up with and it sounded good at the time. I think I'll end up doing Outlaw after all later, but with Agent Stone from Black.
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Reply #7 - 04/18/10 at 22:30:13
 
the ending to Civil War is a play off of Behind the Paint, where Needles' condition is stemmed from an abusive step-mother. he also blames Charlie for bringing her into their home, hence his lack of remorse for killing Charlie. in Behind The Paint, I also include how Needles came across the bank truck, which was Calypso aquiring the keys and giving them to Needles

Logan, you might wanna go back and read the fics already posted. one of which is still in Totally Twisted
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Reply #8 - 04/19/10 at 04:49:03
 
I see a small brawl refrence...
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