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Message started by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/06/10 at 04:32:38

Title: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/06/10 at 04:32:38
Twisted Metal: Insanity
Character Roster:
Needles Kane
Vehicle: Sweet Tooth
Special Weapon: Napalm Cone

Preacher
Vehicle: Brimstone
Special Weapon: Suicide Bomber [Followers]

Bloody Mary
Vehicle: Spectre
Special Weapon: Ghost Missle

No-Face
Vehicle: Crazy 8
Special Weapon: Tazer

Mr. Grimm
Vehicle: Mr. Grimm
Special Weapon: Schythes

John Doe
Vehicle: Roadkill
Special Weapon: 6-Barreled Missle Launcher

Raven
Vehicle: Shadow
Special Weapon: Minigun [It was a secret move in Black]

Agent Stone
Vehicle: SWAT SUV
Special Weapon: .50 Caliber Machine Gun

Dollface
Vehicle: Darkside
Special Weapon: Ram

Billy Ray Stilwell
Vehicle: Junkyard Dog
Special Weapon: Tow-mounted Bomb

Black
Vehicle: Manslaughter
Special Weapon: Ram

Cage
Vehicle: Warthog
Special Weapon: Flamethrowers X2

Kane & Son
Vehicle: Yellow Jacket
Special Weapon: 6 Missles mounted in all directions on the vehicle

Minion
Vehicle: Minion
Special Weapon: ???

Warhawk
Vehicle: Warhawk
Special Weapon: ???

Calypso
Vehicle: '69 Mustang
Special Weapon: M1911A1 Colt .45 [Fired out the side window, driver's side]

Midtown PD
Vehicles: Squad Cars
Special Weapons: Beretta M9's that are fired out the side windows.

FBI
Vehicles: FBI SUVs
Special Weapons: M16's and M1911A1's that are fired out the side windows

US Army
Vehicles: Jeeps [armed with .50 Cals] Sherman Tanks [armed with Cannons and .50 Cals] and Halftracks [armed with .50 Cals]
Special Weapons: See above.

PART ONE COMING SOON
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity Chapter one
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/06/10 at 05:16:13
Twisted Metal: Insanity
Chapter one, part one of three.

NEEDLES: An entire year in the asylum...after winning last year's Twisted Metal, I was back.... I swore to myself that I would become the greatest killer of all time...and I let myself get caught. -Flashback to NEEDLES, surrounded by FBI and soldiers-...And now I was stuck back in this damned place, with all these freaks I wanted to kill! -Screen goes black and then comes back showing NEEDLES in Blackfield's Cafeteria, surrounded by gaurd with MP5's-

NEEDLES:...The freaks...There was this one lady who was always talking about how beautiful she was...Mary, I think she called herself, even though she had never even been with a man, and she had never even had sex before, so what the fuck was she talking about?

NEEDLES: Then there was that no-faced fucking freak, Frank. But everyone called him No-Face.....and even I was scared of him.
There was that screwup SWAT guy, and that inbred pig Stilwell....I had to deal with them every day, that is, until he showed up.

-Scene flashes back to NEEDLES, who is in his cell again. The cell door opens and CALYPSO enters, with several armed gaurds carrying AK47's-

CALYPSO: Hello again, Needles.

NEEDLES: Piss off, you freak, before I snap your neck.
-The gaurd raise their weapons. CALYPSO waves them off-

CALYPSO: Tell me, Needles, do you want out of this asylum?

NEEDLES: Fuck yeah.

CALYPSO: Then I want you to play Twisted Metal.

-NEEDLES stares at CALYPSO hesitantly, and then pushes CALYPSO out of his way as he leaves his cell-

CALYPSO: Needles, NO! Not yet....

NEEDLES: Why?

CALYPSO: Tommorow during your lunch hour, me and my men will attack Blackfield Asylum. Then we will take you to my hideout in the city.

-A gaurd walks down the hall and hears the conversation-

GAURD: Not on my watch, scumbag!

-The GAURD pulls out a .38 and aims it at CALYPSO, and then drops his weapon when he realises that he is severely outnumbered-

GAURD: Oh Christ, no...

-CALYPSO's men fire their rifles at the GAURD, and he falls into a bloody heap on the ground-

CALYPSO: So, Needles....Will you drive?

NEEDLES: I'll play your little game.....-Under his breath-...I can always kill you later.

CALYPSO: What?

NEEDLES: Nothin'.

CALYPSO: Very well. See you and the others tommorow, Needles. -CALYPSO and his men leave the cell block, locking NEEDLE's cell door behind them-

~End of Chapter one~
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by Jironobou on 08/06/10 at 05:47:08
Nice, but how did Calypso survive being killed by Sweet Tooth in his TMB ending?
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/06/10 at 08:05:33
You know....I never thought about that. DAMN! Lol.
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/06/10 at 08:12:10
And as for the firearms in the story, there WILL be on-foot sections for some of the characters. [I took inspiration from Sweet Tour :DD] And the shooting-out-the-window move I took from Black, because in the selection screen nearly everyone has a gun...so yeah. I'll work on Chapter two tommorow.

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Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/06/10 at 08:34:24
Twisted Metal: Insanity
Chapter two, part one of three

~The next morning~

-NEEDLES lies on his cot, anticipating the time when the gaurds will let him and his fellow inmates out, so that they can escape during CALYPSO's attack-

NEEDLES: Gaurd!

-The CELL GAURD walks over to NEEDLE'S cell-

CELL GAURD: What do you want, you fuckin' freak?

NEEDLES: When is lunch?

CELL GAURD: -Checks his watch-...15 minutes, freak.

-NEEDLES stares at the CELL GAURD-

Needles: You're next.

-The CELL GAURD runs away from NEEDLE's cell-

-A few minutes later, a new gaurd unlocks NEEDLE's cell door-

GAURD: Ok, Needles....time for lunch. -The GAURD leads NEEDLES to the Cafeteria, .45 aimed at the back of his head-

GAURD: I'll see you later, you fuckin' pyscho- -The gaurd goes down, riddled with bulletholes-

CALYPSO: Move, move, MOVE!

NEEDLES: Let's get outta here!

WARDEN: Don't let them escape, kill them!

-Six GAURDS fire at CALYPSO's men, but CALYPSO and his gang make quick work of them-

WARDEN: Dammit!

-NEEDLES punches the WARDEN in the face and takes his Revolver-

NEEDLES: Prick.

-BLOODY MARY and JOHN DOE run past NEEDLES-

BLOODY MARY: C'mon Needles! We gotta go! NOW!

JOHN DOE: Don't waste Calypso's time! Let's get goin'!

-NEEDLES shoots the WARDEN in the head and exits the Cafeteria with the rest of the inmates, with CALYPSO in the lead-

CALYPSO: I've got an armored bus outside, waiting to take us out of here and back into Midtown.

-A GAURD armed with an M14 steps out and begins firing rapid shots at CALYPSO, but CALYPSO shoots him in the head with his .45.

-Upon reaching the exit to the Asylum, the inmates find the bus parked outside, gaurded by 3 GANG MEMBERS armed with M1928 Thompsons-

GANG MEMBER: Get in!

-All the inmates get in except for NEEDLES. He aims his Revolver at a GANG MEMBER and shoots him in the stomach. He falls to the ground, writhing in pain. NEEDLES takes his Thompson and gets into the bus-

CALYPSO: Driver! Take us to Midtown!

DRIVER: Yes sir!

-The bus leaves the Asylum as a huge riot breaks out within its walls-

~End of Chapter two-
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by Jironobou on 08/06/10 at 09:02:42
The story so far is...ok, but I really doubt that the contestants would try to help each other out so they could enter a contest to kill each other.

Regarding the Story relating to TMB:
-I'm pretty sure Sweet Tooth never revealed his name to anyone, I understand why Calypso knows it, considering he apparently has supernatural powers(but even when he wins TM in the colorful games, Calypso calls him Sweet Tooth anyways), but I don't think he would reveal it to the guards or the inmates.

-Sweet Tooth has never seemed like the gun toting character, every time he has been on foot, he's usually toting a stabbing weapon(like the knife from black or the Machete from 2011), the only time I've seen him with a gun was when he was competing.  I guess it's my view on the character, I mean, I think he's the kind of guy who likes to feel his kills, and prefers a more visceral approach, which is why I was kind of expecting him to tackle the Warden and break his neck or something during the story.

still, as a stand alone story, this is very well written, and I'd like to see more of it.
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/06/10 at 17:23:11
Twisted Metal: Insanity
Chapter three, part one of three

-CALYPSO's bus parks in an abandoned junkyard on the outskirts of Midtown-

CALYPSO: Welcome to my HQ, contestants.

NEEDLES: This place is a dump.

CALYPSO: It's an improvement from Blackfield Asylum, Needles.

NEEDLES: Ahhh...you're right.

DRIVER: Everyone out!

-The CONTESTANTS exit the  bus-

CALYPSO: Welcome to Twisted Metal! I am Calypso, and this entire city and beyond is your battleground, your warzone! Now, let me get this straight: There are flares around the battlezones. If you go past these flares, you'll be driving straight into your death. I have .50 Cal emplacements and minefields all around the areas where you're not supposed to go.

NEEDLES: Sounds fair.

CALYPSO: Very well.

NO-FACE: Where are our cars?

CALYPSO: -Points to a garage- Your cars are in there.

-The CONTESTANTS enter the garage and enter their vehicles-

BLOODY MARY: Where do we start?

CALYPSO: Like I said, the entire city of Midtown is your battleground. And your prize- One wish. Let the games begin!

-The CONTESTANTS drive off into the city-

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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/07/10 at 00:18:17
Jiron,
Hmmmm....you're right. Ironic, no?
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/07/10 at 00:35:37
Twisted Metal: Insanity
Chapter three, part two of three

MAN: Look out!

YOUNG WOMAN: They're coming!

-People duck for cover as missles and Machine Gun bullets whiz over their heads. The first battle of the Competition has started.-

OLDER MAN: Someone call 911!

-SWEET TOOTH plowed through a small house, firing his Machine Guns at BRIMSTONE, whom he was chasing-

PREACHER: You will not kill me, foul sinner! Prepare to taste the fires of Hell!

-BRIMSTONE quickly spun around and catapulted a FOLLOWER on to the top of SWEET TOOTH-

NEEDLES: Holy shit!

-NEEDLES takes off at full speed, thus throwing the FOLLOWER off of his Ice Cream Truck-

FOLLOWER: Repent, sinner! Repennnnnnnnnnnnt!

-The FOLLOWER explodes, damages noone-

PREACHER: Damned sinner! I'll get you!

-PREACHER fires two Power Missles at the back of SWEET TOOTH, and it's a direct hit as both back doors fly off-

PREACHER: Yes! Rot in Hell!

-Needles plants a Mine from the back of his Truck, with BRIMSTONE following him-

PREACHER: I'll get you...I'll get you...Oh God...is that what I think it is-

-PREACHER tries to stop to avoid the mine, but is too late. His vehicle explodes, and PREACHER crawls out of his burning vehicle-

PREACHER:...Dear God...damn you, sinner...-PREACHER crosses himself, and then falls face-first on to the road, blood gushing from the wounds sustained by the explosion-
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/08/10 at 06:15:36
Twisted Metal: Insanity Chapter four, part two of three -SPECTRE swerves around the corner, firing her side-mounted Machine Gun at DARKSIDE, who was pursuing CRAZY 8.-

NO-FACE: Shit, she's on me, she's on me...

-DARKSIDE used her Ram attack to crash into CRAZY 8, sending his vehicle flying-

NO-FACE: AHHHHH! -NO-FACE's car is flipped over onto it's side. He crawls out and attempts to push it back over, but is shot down by DARKSIDE's Machine Guns-

NO-FACE: Arrrgghhhh...-NO-FACE pulls out his .38 and fires at DARKSIDE, but his bullets have no effect on the semi-

NO-FACE: This is the end....I'm not going out like this. -NO-FACE puts the pistol to his head and pulls the trigger-

DOLLFACE: One less opponent to worry about!

-SPECTRE fires a Ghost Missle at DARKSIDE, and it hits, damaging the right side of the truck and disabling one of the Machine Guns-

BLOODY MARY: Take that you ugly bitch! Ha ha ha!

DOLLFACE: Screw you...-DARKSIDE fires a Fire Missle at SPECTRE and misses-

Dollface: No!...Can't let her get away....

-SPECTRE fires her Machine Guns at DARKSIDE's fuel tanks, damaging them-

BLOODY MARY: Ha!

-WARTHOG comes along and fires his Flamethrowers at DARKSIDE, and the fuel leaking out of the semi catches fire, engulfing the truck in flames. The truck explodes, and screams can be heard coming from the cab-

CAGE:...No...no no no....-CAGE parks his vehicle and sobs uncontrollably-

-SPECTRE speeds past WARTHOG-

BLOODY MARY: You're makin' yourself an easy target, baby!

CAGE: What did you say- -Cage gets rammed by MANSLAUGHTER-

BLACK:...Black win contest...Black destroy Calypso...

CAGE: Gah...Gotta suck it up and fight!

-WARTHOG speeds forward and accidently hits a man-

MAN: Ahhhh!...-MAN is crushed under WARTHOG's tank treads-

CAGE: Oh God no, not again...Please God, not again...-CAGE begins sobbing again as SWEET TOOTH and MANSLAUGHTER fire their Machine Guns at him-

CAGE: Oh shi- -WARTHOG explodes and CAGE runs out of what's left of his vehicle, on fire-

CAGE: OH GOD PUT IT OUT...Arrrghhh...Auughhhhh...-CAGE burns to death-

NEEDLES: Stupid bastard.

-MANSLAUGHTER fires a Power Missle at SWEET TOOTH-

NEEDLES: Stupid pig...

-NEEDLES gets out of his Ice Cream Truck and pulls BLACK out of his truck, and then stabs him repeatedly with a knife, then climbs back into his Ice Cream Truck and speeds away-

~MEANWHILE~

-PREACHER comes to, and crawls away from his wrecked El Camino-

PREACHER:...Sinner...you will pay for attempting to kill a man of God!

-The DEMON inside of PREACHER speaks to him-

DEMON: You are my child, Jebidiah! You shall do MY bidding! GO, AND KILL!

PREACHER:....No...I mustn't...I must go to my place of Sanctuary!

-PREACHER retreats to an old church on the outskirts of Midtown-

PREACHER:...Forgive me, God, but I must kill to destroy the Demon inside of me...-PREACHER gets onto a chair, leans up against a cross, lifts up a nailgun, and shoots himself through both hand, kicking out the chair from under him-

PREACHER: FORGIVE ME, LORD....
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/08/10 at 07:01:52
Twisted Metal: Insanity Chapter five part two of three -PREACHER passes out from the pain, blood dripping from his wounded hands-

~MEANWHILE~

-NEEDLES chases ROADKILL down an alley, and leans out his window, firing his Thompson at ROADKILL-

JOHN DOE: He's got a machine gun! How am I supposed to shake him off of me?

NEEDLES: You can't escape, freak! Ha ha ha ha ha ha! -SWEET TOOTH launches a Napalm Cone at ROADKILL, and it hits. A peice of shrapnel goes into JOHN DOE's neck, and he cries out in agony as blood runs down his wound and onto his back-

JOHN DOE: CLOWWWNNNN...I'll kill you!!

-ROADKILL quickly spins around and fires six Rockets at SWEET TOOTH. The Rockets hit SWEET TOOTH'S front end, knocking out both of his Machine Guns-

NEEDLES: At least I still have this! -NEEDLES pulls out his Thompson and fires an entire 20-round clip into ROADKILL's front windshield, and multiple bullets hit JOHN DOE in his chest and neck-

JOHN DOE: No....no...I...I need to know...Who I...Who I am....no...-Blood pours from the bulletholes riddling JOHN's body, and he slumps down in his seat and dies-

NEEDLES: Mwahahahahaha....-SWEET TOOTH drops a Gas Can onto ROADKILL, setting the car on fire-

-SPECTRE drops a Satellite Bomb near SWEET TOOTH, which gets NEEDLE's attention-

NEEDLES: BITCH! -NEEDLES puts away his empty Thompson, and pulls out his Revolver he took from the Warden a few hours ago-

BLOODY MARY: Ohhh, a pistol, I'm so scared! -SPECTRE speeds away, with SWEET TOOTH in pursuit-

BLOODY MARY: Chase me, chase me! You know you want me, baby!

NEEDLES: Grrr...-NEEDLES fires a Homing Missle at SPECTRE and it hits the back of her car, BLOODY MARY loses control and crashes into a house. There's a family inside, taking cover inside the home. A MAN aims a Shotgun at SPECTRE-

MAN: Get out, you freak!

BLOODY MARY: Shit. -SPECTRE goes into reverse and drives away from the house-

MAN: And don't you dare come back!

~MEANWHILE~

-PREACHER loads a Revolver and a Beretta 93R-

PREACHER: I shall do the Lord's work.

-PREACHER walks out to a small building, and goes inside revealing another El Camino, fully-equipped for the Twisted Metal Competition, armed with Rocket Launchers on the sides, with a Mounted Bazooka in the front, between the seats, and a Mounted M60 on top-

PREACHER: Repent, sinners...-PREACHER crosses himself and drives away at top speed-

~MEANWHILE, at Midtown City Hall~

NEWS REPORTER: Mayor Pluth, what do you plan on doing about the Twisted Metal Tournament?

MAYOR PLUTH: I plan on sending out all Midtown PD to stop the Competitors, along with all SWAT units.

NEWS REPORTER: Sounds like a risky plan, Mr. Mayor...do you think it'll work?

MAYOR PLUTH: I have faith in the Police and the local SWAT teams.

NEWS REPORTER: And what do you think we should do, Governor Majchrowicz?

GOVERNER MAJCHROWICZ: I trust Mayor Pluth, and I also have faith in Midtown's dedicated Police Force.

NEWS REPORTER: This is Tom Jameson, with Channel 7 Ne- -A Machine Gun bullet flies through the window, and hits the News Reporter in the neck-

NEWS REPORTER: Auuuughhh...-The NEWS REPORTER is choking on his own blood- Rauuughhhhh....Oh Goddd...

GOVERNOR MAJCHROWICZ: Someone get a Paramedic Team up here, NOW!

MAYOR PLUTH: Captain!

CAPTAIN WILLIAMS: Sir! -Loads M16-

MAYOR PLUTH: Take your SWAT team out and eliminate as many Contestants as you can. All your SWAT Jeeps have been fitted with LAW Anti-Tank weapons, and .50 Cals with armor-piercing bullets. Now get movin'.

CAPTAIN WILLIAMS: Yes sir! -Williams and his SWAT team move out-
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/08/10 at 07:22:19
Twisted Metal: Insanity
Chapter six
Part two of three

-The SWAT teams speed out of the City Hall's garage, in their search for Contestants-

JEEP ONE: Jeep 2, do you see anything?

JEEP TWO: No, I don't. We should head deeper into down.

JEEP ONE: Jeep 3, disembark and scout out for us!

JEEP THREE: Yes sir, Captain. Moving out.

-The men of JEEP THREE leave the vehicle and run up the road, armed with M16's and MP5's.-

SWAT MEMBER: -On radio- Captain Williams, it looks clear- GET DOWN! -The SWAT TEAM exchange fire with a target, and the line goes silent-

CAPTAIN WILLIAMS: Damn it. Ok men, let's keep moving. We have to find Jeep 3.

-The other two SWAT JEEPS slowly drive down the road, until a white El Camino speeds down the road, firing Rockets and Machine Gun bullets at the SWAT Jeeps-

CAPTAIN WILLIAMS: All units, open fire! Open fire! Shoot to kill!

-A Rocket hits JEEP 1, destroying it-

CAPTAIN WILLIAMS: Oh God! Fall back! Fall back to the City Hall- -A Revolver bullet goes straight through CAPTAIN WILLIAMS' head, and peices of blood, brain, and skull fly everywhere as he slumps over, dead-

SWAT MEMBER: Shit! We have to get out of here!

-BRIMSTONE 2 charges the SWAT JEEP, firing LAW Rockets at it-

PREACHER: Repent, foul sinners!

-The SWAT JEEP explodes, and a CB goes flying and lands in the street-

CB: Captain! This is Mayor Pluth. Are you hit? Report in! Over.

-PREACHER runs over the CB, destroying it-

PREACHER:...They needed to be taught a lesson. Thus saith the Lord.

DEMON: You shall do Satan's work, Jebidiah! MY work!

PREACHER: -Bangs his head against his steering wheel- LEAVE ME, MONSTER! Leave my body, you demon from Hell!

-PREACHER continues hitting his head as the Competition continues-
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/09/10 at 05:18:23
-SWEET TOOTH drove down the road, plowing through traffic and pedestrians. He was on Midtown Expressway 104, looking for a gas station so he could refuel his Ice Cream Truck.-

NEEDLES: Gotta get gas....

-NEEDLES sees a Shell at the side of the road-

NEEDLES: Finally!

-NEEDLES crashes into a car that was at a pump, effectively moving it out of the way-

MAN: What the hell, man? That was my car!

NEEDLES: I don't care. -NEEDLES grabs the MAN, and slams him against his Ice Cream Truck. He pulls out his knife, and stabs the MAN in the chest, then pulls up with the knife, gutting him-

MAN:....Clown....Jesus Christ...-The MAN dies-

-NEEDLES drops the MAN, cuts his head off with his knife, and throws him into the back of the Ice Cream Truck, and then gets some gas and leaves, heading back into battle-

-SHADOW crashes through a building, and RAVEN fires her Minigun at SWEET TOOTH-

RAVEN: For Kelly! Die, you clown freak!

NEEDLES:..I'm getting tired of people calling me a FREAK! Die, you bitch! -NEEDLES rams into SHADOW, turning the old hearse over onto it's side-

RAVEN: Oh God...Oh God....-RAVEN gets out and flips her car back over and gets back in, and fires a Homing Missle at SWEET TOOTH, hitting the side and blowing his right-side door off-

NEEDLES: Dammit...-NEEDLES tries to fire his Machine Guns, but finds that they are broken-

NEEDLES: I'm gonna have to steal from her....-NEEDLES fires a Napalm Cone at SHADOW, and it blows the entire back end off-

NEEDLES: She MUST be dead...Noone could survive that.

-NEEDLES walks up to the wrecked car, and takes both Machine Guns off the car, and straps them onto where his wrecked Machine Guns were-

NEEDLES: Good to go. -SWEET TOOTH drives away, but SHADOW follows, firing the Minigun at him-

NEEDLES: Oh shit! -NEEDLES turns his Ice Cream Truck around and chases SHADOW, who is weak from all the damage she took from SWEET TOOTH's attack. He chases her into the gas station-

NEEDLES: Time to die, bitch! -NEEDLES fires a Power Missle at the gas tanks, which engulfs the entire station in flames, and screams can be heard from SHADOW's car as it is also caught in the fire-

NEEDLES: That'll teach ya...-NEEDLES drives away as the gas station explodes-
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/09/10 at 05:19:20
What do you guys think of it so far?
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by Jironobou on 08/09/10 at 05:39:27
I have one question regarding the last chapter...

How the fuck did Raven flip her hearse over?
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by ThumperMan3000 on 08/09/10 at 07:53:02
Pretty good. I doubt the contestants would aid each other in escaping Blackfield, but hey, at least the help was only temporary.

Good job. I so love the part where Brimstone slaughters the SWAT Team.
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/09/10 at 22:18:04
Brimstone kicked their asses, huh?
ANYWAY..
Daily updates for everyone!
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/09/10 at 22:24:46
Ok let's see: List of the Dead, tell me if I missed anyone x.x
Crazy 8: Dead
Warthog: Dead
Shadow: Dead
Roadkill: Dead
Brimstone 1: Destroyed until Brimstone 2 arrived
Manslaughter: Dead
Outlaw: Dead
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Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/10/10 at 00:32:46
Twisted Metal Insanity Chapter seven, part two of three -AGENT STONE parked his SWAT vehicle behind a building, got out, dropped to his knees, and began to pray for his own safety-

AGENT STONE: Lord, protect me...

-SPECTRE speeds in the direction of AGENT STONE, and runs him over-

BLOODY MARY: Sorry, baby!

-AGENT STONE pulls out his M9, and fires at SPECTRE as she drives away-

AGENT STONE:...I'll get you.....bitch...

BLOODY MARY: Go ahead and try!

-SPECTRE casually drives away as AGENT STONE bleeds to death on the ground-

BLOODY MARY: He has to be dead....this area looks clear.

-A white El Camino crashes through a fence and fires it's M60 at SPECTRE-

BLOODY MARY: Not this bastard again!

PREACHER: Repent, sinner! Repent!

BLOODY MARY: You can't catch meeee!

PREACHER:...Yes I can. -Preacher fires a Rocket at SPECTRE, which hits the back of the car, and it crashes into a streetlight-

BLOODY MARY: Uggghhh...

-BRIMSTONE drives away, and BLOODY MARY gets out of her car and chases BRIMSTONE, her high-heels tapping wildly on the street-

BLOODY MARY: I'll get you, you bible-thumping freak!

PREACHER:...We shall see, dear girl. We shall see.
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/10/10 at 01:07:43
Guys, sorry if my stories get a little dull, my girlfriend Dimitra went to South Carolina for a week, and my dad's been drinkin a lot, so yeah...

I'm not using the story to channel any anger though- I'm writing it because I'm a HUGE Twisted Metal fan, and I've always wanted to contribute to TMA.
-Scott
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by Jironobou on 08/10/10 at 01:40:58
It isn't really boring, it's just that... a lot doesn't make sense, like most of the things I've already pointed out, but I also wonder how the drivers would be able to yell at each other whilst in a car, and surrounded by the sounds of bullets, missiles, other various explosions, and ambient noises.
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/11/10 at 03:25:56
Twisted Metal: Insanity
Chapter eight, part two of three

~Meanwhile, at Midtown City Hall~

POLICE OFFICER: Mayor Pluth, we've gotten reports from our helicopters that a white El Camino, heavily armed, is driving around Midtown.

MAYOR PLUTH: Do you happen to know what it's doing?

POLICE OFFICER: No, sir. But it's obviously a Contestant... What should we do about it?

MAYOR PLUTH: I say we-

-GOVERNER MAJCHROWICZ barges into the room-

GOVERNOR MAJCHROWICZ: Sir, a refinery on the east side of town just exploded! A few witnesses who survived the attack said that they saw a El Camino and a Military-issue motorcycle battling there at the time of the attack...what should we do? Should we send out Warhawk?

MAYOR PLUTH: No. We should send out our military to deal with the threat.

POLICE OFFICER: We have a military?

MAYOR PLUTH: Yes. A 101st Airborne base is located on the outskirts of town, near the abandoned skyscrapers. I know the Commander, I'll get on the phone with him right now.

-MAYOR PLUTH calls the COMMANDER of the 101st-

MAYOR PLUTH: We need help here! The Twisted Metal Contestants are destroying the city and we've lost contact with our SWAT team. Send over as much armor and infantary as you can, we're going to need it.

COMMANDER: -On the other line- I'll send out a platoon of men and an armored unit, just give me some time to get them ready and I'll send them your way.

MAYOR PLUTH: Yes sir. -Hangs up-...We've got reinforcements, gentlemen....

~Meanwhile, back at the ruined refinery~

-PREACHER climbs out of his El Camino and aims his Beretta 93R at Mr. Grimm, who is taking cover behind a destroyed truck-

PREACHER: Show yourself, you coward! Your motorcycle is destroyed, and you're wounded! Give up now!

MR. GRIMM: Screw you!

PREACHER: I don't want to have to go over there and end your life, Grimm! Surrender!

MR. GRIMM: Up yours, old man! -MR. GRIMM leans out from his cover and fires an M16 at PREACHER-

PREACHER: You shoot at a preacher? My God! -Preacher returns fire with his 93R-

MR. GRIMM: Wait- Do you hear that? I hear...planes...

PREACHER: I hear them too...

-Two C47's drop some 101st troopers near PREACHER and MR. GRIMM's position-

PARATROOPER: There they are!

PREACHER: Forget this! To hell with you all! -PREACHER gets in his El Camino and drives away-

MR. GRIMM: Dammit, priest! Don't leave me here! -MR. GRIMM runs after PREACHER as he drives off-

MR. GRIMM: Prieeeeeeeeeeeeeest!!

PARATROOPER: There he is, take him down! Take him down!

-A group of PARATROOPERS surround MR. GRIMM-

MR. GRIMM: Damn it....-The PARATROOPERS open fire on MR. GRIMM, riddling him with bulletholes, and he falls to the ground, squirming and writhing in pain-

-An OFFICER walks up to MR. GRIMM and shoots him in the head with his .45-

OFFICER: One down.

PARATROOPER: Good work, Sgt. Magnason.

SGT. MAGNASON: Let's head into town and meet up with our Tank Unit!

-The PARATROOPERS head into town-
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/11/10 at 03:34:30
So now the Army is out to stop Calypso and his Contest. Things are going to get crazy.
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by tmfan89 on 08/11/10 at 06:39:52
I don't know I read it it held my attention but I think you have to go with a simpler story. Parts of the story were really good while others were confusing.

You are trying a little too hard for a grandiose story I say shave it down a bit and make it more compact because you have cool elements to work with. Eh what do I know my fan fic has combatants traveling between dimensions.
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/12/10 at 00:16:10
Twisted Metal Insanity
Chapter nine
Part two of three

~Meanwhile, in Midtown~

-PREACHER went around slaughtering the Twisted Metal Contestants, leaving SPECTRE, YELLOW JACKET and SWEET TOOTH as the last Combatants in the Contest-

SWEET TOOTH: Where is everyone?...This Contest is gettin' boring. I need to kill someone. NOW!!!

~Meanwhile, at Calypso's Base~

CALYPSO: -Watching the Contest unfold on a large TV- It looks like that preacher is winning.

BODYGAURD: No, he's not. His vehicle was destroyed, and he's using a new, modified car.

CALYPSO: What...the...FUCK? We've got to stop him, send out Minion!

BODYGAURD: Yes sir.

-The BODYGAURD goes into a large garage, and enters, finding a large man with a animal-skin mask sitting on a large tanker armed with a flamethrower-

BODYGAURD: Marcus.

MARCUS: What do you want?

BODYGAURD: We need you to go out and stop that preacher, he's ruining the Contest.

MARCUS: I'm on it. -MARCUS climbs into his vehicle, Minion, and starts it up-

BODYGAURD: I'll open the garage door for you...

-MINION drives right through the door, smashing it-

BODYGAURD:...Er....Never mind...

~Meanwhile, in Midtown~ [PARATROOPERS' point of view]

SGT. MAGNASON: Keep you eyes open, boys.

-The PARATROOPERS see three Sherman Tanks, two Jeeps, and a Haltrack-

SGT. MAGNASON: That's our Armored Unit! Let's move!

TANK COMMANDER: Hey! Over here!

-The TANK COMMANDER and his Sherman Tank are hit by multiple Rockets and armor-piercing bullets-

SGT. MAGNASON: What the hell?

-The Halftrack explodes-

-The remaining Tanks and Jeeps retreat-

SGT. MAGNASON: Come back, you cowards!

-MINION charges at full speed towards the PARATROOPERS-

PARATROOPERS: Fall back, retreat!

SGT. MAGNASON: All cowards and traitors will be shot-

-SGT. MAGNASON is hit multiple times in the chest-

SGT. MAGNASON: You pricks! Don't leave me! I'll have your heads for this! TRAITORS!

-MINION crushes SGT. MAGNASON underneath his massive tires-

-SWEET TOOTH crashes through a Police barricade, fires his Machine Guns and his remaining Napalm Cones at MINION, and his Napalm Cones blow up the large gas tank on the back of MARCUS' vehicle, blowing the back of the large tanker up, and sending MARCUS flying out the front windshield. SWEET TOOTH parks in front of him-

MARCUS: -Backs away- W-who are you?..

NEEDLES: -Gets out his vehicle and approaches MARCUS- I...am Needles Kane.

MARCUS:...Brother?

NEEDLES:...It...it's you...I thought you were dead...after Dad got killed, you disappeared, and...

MARCUS: And you became a fucking pyschopath, from what I've heard.

NEEDLES: Hmm. True!

-SPECTRE parks behind MARCUS, and BLOODY MARY gets out of her car, and aims a Revolver at MARCUS' head-

BLOODY MARY: Less talking and more fighting, boys. -BLOODY MARY shoots MARCUS in the back of the head-

NEEDLES:...You whore...-NEEDLES pounces on BLOODY MARY-

BLOODY MARY:...P-please d-don't kill me...please...

NEEDLES: Shut up...-MEEDLES slowly pulls out his knife-

BLOODY MARY: D-don't...PLEASE...

-YELLOW JACKET speeds towards NEEDLES-

NEEDLES: Shit! -NEEDLES and BLOODY MARY jump out of the way of YELLOW JACKET, and YELLOW JACKET explodes as the taxi speeds past them-

BLOODY MARY: What the hell?

-BRIMSTONE drives up to NEEDLES and BLOODY MARY, and PREACHER gets out, aiming his 93R at NEEDLES, and his Revolver at BLOODY MARY-

PREACHER: Time to repent, sinners....

[The climatic ending coming soon]



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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/13/10 at 03:30:30
Twisted Metal Insanity
Chapter ten
Part three of three

-PREACHER has both of his guns aimed at NEEDLES and BLOODY MARY-

PREACHER: Repent or die.

NEEDLES:...Let me think...No.

-NEEDLES, PREACHER, and BLOODY MARY hear multiple vehicles behind them, and they turn around to see two FBI vehicles behind them-

FBI AGENT: Hands up!

PREACHER:...Very well...-PREACHER drops both his guns, then reaches into his robes and pulls out a M79 Grenade Launcher-

FBI AGENT: Put the gun down, sir!

PREACHER: Rot in hell. -PREACHER fires a grenade at one FBI SUV, blowing it up-

FBI AGENT: Kill him! Shoot to kill!

-The FBI AGENTS from the surviving SUV jump out, firing their M16's at PREACHER-

PREACHER: You dare shoot at a man of God? -PREACHER fires a grenade at the group of Agents, blowing them up-

PREACHER: -Puts the M79 away and crosses himself-

-WARHAWK appears from behind a building-

WARHAWK'S PILOT: Surrender now!

PREACHER: Shit...-Turns around and sees a church-

PREACHER: I'm out of here! -Blasts the church doors open with the M79, and walks in-

-A PRIEST walks up to him-

PRIEST: Jebediah! Have you gone mad?! I will NOT tolerate this attack on the house of God!

PREACHER: Silence, you old fool! -PREACHER grabs the PRIEST and tosses him aside, then goes up to the top of the church-

PREACHER: -Pulls out his M79 and aims it at NEEDLES and BLOODY MARY, who are taking cover-

PREACHER:...Die...

-WARHAWK fires a Rocket at PREACHER, throwing him off of the roof-

PREACHER: Whoa- AHHHHHUUUUGHHHHHHHH....-PREACHER falls down onto a car, and the car alarms go off-

~Down on the ground~

-BLOODY MARY gets into her sports car and flees-

BLOODY MARY: Fuck this shit! -Drives away-

NEEDLES: Shit. -NEEDLES gets into his Ice Cream Truck, and fires a few Homing Missles at WARHAWK-

WARKHAWK: Taking fire! Gunner, take him out!

WARHAWK'S GUNNER: On it! -WARHAWK'S GUNNER fires a Minigun at Sweet Tooth, and the bullets riddle his Ice Cream Truck with bulletholes. NEEDLES stops his Ice Cream Truck-

WARHAWK'S GUNNER: Target down.

WARHAWK'S PILOT: Let's get down there and verify him.

-WARHAWK lands in front of Sweet Tooth-

NEEDLES: Fooled ya, bitches!

-NEEDLES fires a Power Missle at WARHAWK, and it goes into the cockpit, destroying the main controls and killing the PILOT. The GUNNER hops out and limps away, but NEEDLES jumps on him, rips his helmet off, and stabs him in the back of the head. He then cuts his head off, and throws it into the back of his truck-

NEEDLES: Time to go and see Calypso.

-NEEDLES goes to CALYPSO's hideout in the Junkyard-

CALYPSO: Congratulations, Needles, you have won my Contest and may claim your prize...What is your wish?

NEEDLES: You know, I never really thought of that. Shit.

CALYPSO:...Needles, you fool....

NEEDLES: Now I know what I want! -NEEDLES jumps on top of CALYPSO and punches him in the face, then slits his throat, cuts off his head, then slowly walks to his truck as CALYPSO's BODYGAURDS watch, shocked-

NEEDLES: -Tosses CALYPSO's head into the back of his truck, then sits on CALYPSO's former throne-

NEEDLES: Gaurds!

BODYGAURDS: -All at once- Y-yes sir?..

NEEDLES: Go and get more Contestants from Blackfield. I want to have another Contest.

BODYGAURDS: Y-yes sir! We're on it, sir...

-The BODYGAURDS get back into the bus and depart-

NEEDLES: I am Needles, and I thank you for playing Twisted Metal!

-NEEDLES walks up to the reader, grabs him/her, and slashes the reader in the throat with his knife-


                      TWISTED METAL: INSANITY

SPECIAL THANKS TO: Everyone here at TMA, David Jaffe & Scott Campbell, the readers, Dimitra [I love you babe!], and Needles Kane.




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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/13/10 at 03:36:54
Twisted Metal Insanity
Part X of X
EPILOUGE

Needles finally got what he wanted, he was finally able to rule over the Twisted Metal Competition. Needles missed being a Contestant, but he was happy! He was finally away from everyone who thought he was crazy, and the Preacher was dead, so he'd never have to worry about him again!

His Bodygaurds weren't so fond of their new leader, as he had a tendency to kill them, but Needles didn't mind one bit, because he knew that one day he would pass control of the Tournament to someone else, and then get back into his Ice Cream Truck, and drive back into the world to terrorize Midtown!

I am Scott, and I thank you for reading Twisted Metal Insanity!
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by ThumperMan3000 on 08/13/10 at 04:21:16
Wow, that is one twisted story.  Brimstone killing the police and the F.B.I. was messed up.

This was a great story. I hope you plan another someday.
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/13/10 at 04:54:49
Thank you, and in fact there's going to be a sequel, from Bloody Mary's point of view...

NOW FOR Q&A!
1. Why did Preacher kill himself, you may ask?
A. Because he threw the Priest down, which is a symbol of throwing away your religion.

2. "How the fuck did Raven flip her hearse over?"
A. Pushing it back onto it's wheels.

3. Why were the on-foot scenes so sparse?
A. I wanted to keep the Contest on wheels, to say the least.
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/13/10 at 05:07:49
TWISTED METAL INSANITY
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"Preacher Dies"

PREACHER: Whoa- AHHHHHHHHUUUUGHHHHHH....I fell for HOURS! Nothin' below me but BOILIN' LAVA!

NEEDLES: Oooh! Hours long time!

_______________________________________________________

"Needles wins Twisted Metal"

NEEDLES: Now I know what I want!

-NEEDLES jumps on top of CALYPSO and punches him in the face-

CALYPSO: Gaurds! Kill the intruder!

NEEDLES: Aw shit...

-CALYPSO's BODYGAURDS surround NEEDLES and open fire with their AK47's-

__________________________________________________________

"Two Brothers"

MARCUS:...I-it's you...

NEEDLES: Fuck you. -NEEDLES stabs MARCUS in the face-

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"Epilouge"

I am Scott, and I thank you for-

CALYPSO: Screw you, that's MY line! -CALYPSO pulls out a Glock-

*Blam*

You don't even know what I was going to sa-

*Blam*

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EXTRAS AND MORE

Surviving Characters: Needles Kane, Bloody Mary, the Bodygaurds, Mayor Pluth, Mayor Majchrowicz, Random Police Officer.

Next Fanfic: Twisted Metal Insanity: 2

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I'ma go play  Twisted Metal 1.
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Title: Re: Twisted Metal: Insanity
Post by X.Needles_Kane.X on 08/13/10 at 06:56:32
tmfan89,
Travelling between dimensions? I can see it now....
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